When Are You Going to Write an ADULT book?
The capitalizd "ADULT" is theirs: The people who smirk when I say I write "children's books" and think I'm the worst sort of underachiever when I say I'm good for about 750 words--no more, and often, no less (not good, as picture book publishers seem to want younger and shorter). And, no, my ambition is not to write the next great literary novel, or the next Harry Potter-ish zillion-seller. I write mostly picture books (and recently, chapter books). Books for children--children between the ages of 0 and 9, yeah, those little guys. The ones that can't read well, or can't read at all... yet. Because inside--regardless of what this blousy, saggy, wrinkled body I inhabit may imply--I am a child aged somewhere between 0 and 9. I realized today, as I walked all alone down some unknown road in an unfamiliar city--feeling little, lost, lonely and sad--that (to paraphrase my own text) no matter how big I get or how old I get, I will probably always be a child.
I want what every child wants: love, acceptance, companionship, and reassurance that whatever I do or don't do, at the end of the day someone fearless and reliable will make sure I am cozily tucked in. That I have everything I need--including a glass of water and lovies. That, those mean, scary under-the-bed spookies have all been chased away. And that, at the end of it all, no matter how ugly, or mean, or hard it seems--everything is going to come out just fine.
Don't you?
Where to Begin? ‘Tis A Puzzlement
I have a brilliant idea for a story. As soon as I figure out where to begin I’m going to write it. However…knowing when and which window to climb through to enter a story—‘tis a puzzlement. Recently, I visited the Hampton Court Maze outside of London (Henry the 8th old place, William and Mary's too). Don't ask me why as I'm not much for puzzles. Sure, if someone dumps a jigsaw puzzle on the table, I’ll work at fitting the pieces together (especially if it’s dumped on a coffee table during sports or the news). But, not if it’s one of those edgeless or upside down puzzles…and not if you expect me to work from the inside out! If I’m going to work a puzzle, I’m going to work it my way-- by fitting the edges together first.
Hampton Court Maze begins at a neatly trimmed archway in the hedge beckoning “Begin Here” and I did. So I’m in this centuries old Maze. I’m wandering, doubling back, turning and returning on a quest to find the middle. It wasn’t fun. It was frustrating, irritating, and a little frightening. From somewhere in the middle of the Maze, children shouted “Middle! I found Middle!” “I’m in the middle” “Come and get me!” which only irritated me more. I caught flickers of bright colors as they ran and jumped and rejoiced—in the middle! I wanted to be “in the middle” real bad…Or I wanted to quit. (What if I’m still wandering around in here lost at closing time? Will someone rescue me? Send a helicopter?). And it dawned on me: Being lost in a Maze is like writing.
I don’t do aimless. I am not a merry wanderer—no matter how bright the day, how green the grass, how sweetly scented the breeze. Nor do I like wandering around an idea, webbing, character sketching, brainstorming or any other of those “where to begin” writing exercises. I tire too easily. After all that, by the time I’ve found the beginning, I’m too worn out to take the journey.
When I finally found the Maze’s Center, I snapped a photo to prove it, and then started back out. The way out wasn’t any easier than the way in. (I had not pulled a Gretel and laid a trail to follow.) But it was heaps more fun. Because I knew, as sure as I had entered and found the center, that I could find the way out. It’s like that with writing, too. Once a neatly trimmed beginning has lured me inside I’m raring to go. I may not enjoy it, but I’ll wander, follow turns and twists, double back, whatever it takes to get to the end.
Until then I sit and wait, like a roosting hen beneath a Hampton Court Maze hedgerow, perched on my story idea, keeping it warm, turning it regularly, trusting that when the time is right, the perfect beginning will poke me in the butt.
BLAH BLAH BLAH or Bucket List
I want….I want….I want. Career-wise, life-wise I want so much. Don’t you? Life-wise my wants are easy to list: health, wealth and happiness for me and my loved ones. Not too much to wish for is it?
Career-wise, especially when the career I am pursuing is that of a children’s book author, listing my wants is not so easy. I say, “I want to be a successful children’s book author.” But when I’m asked what I mean by “successful” a whole lot of blah blah blah comes out. Why is that?
Is it because I don't know? Or because I'm hesitant to say...to put it out there...to be so bold. Maybe. Maybe I have never taken the time to define "success" for myself. Or, maybe I have never been able to mustered up the courage to clearly define successful for myself. Courage--it definitely takes courage!
Ask a little kid: What do you want to be when you grow up?
Ballerina! Movie Star! Rock Star! Doctor! Astronaut! President! Superman! Ice Cream Girl! they respond, listing infinite choices and possiblities.
We don’t say, “fat chance” or “who the heck do you think you are wanting to be president?” or “be realistic.” We say: “Go for it!”
Not so for us big guys. It seems the older, more mature, more responsible we are the less willing we are to speak up for ourselves, to dare to define “it.”
How can we “go for it” when we won’t let ourselves admit what “it” is?
Dancing With The Stars co-host, Brooke Burke, started her career as a pretzel maker in a mall shop, and look at her now! Last week, Oprah asked Brooke how she went from a contestant on the show to hosting it. Brooke shared how she had created a Bucket List of desires for herself, which she shared, listed, twittered about. She said she had to let herself be vulnerable, to “put it out there” without worrying that she was sounding grabby, or being unrealistic. And to be willing to say to the world, “This is what I want. And, yes, I am going to go for it!” Brooke’s Bucket List included Co-hosting Dancing With the Stars and Being a guest on Oprah! She put it out there. Brooke risked being scoffed at, shot down, teased, being told “fat chance” and “who the heck do you think you are?” And, as Brooke said, “what’s the worst that could happen?”
Following Brooke’s example, I am daring me to create a career bucket list:
What do I want to be when I grow up? A successful children’s book author!
To me, Kelly Goldman Bennett, “Successful Children’s Book Author” means:
I will write picture books and chapter book manuscripts editors want to publish.
My books will receive starred reviews.
My books will receive awards and be on reading lists.
My books will be featured “all school” and “all city” reads.
Children, parents, librarians and teachers will send me fan mail.
Editors will seek me out; ask me to write for them.
Conference Coordinators will invite me to speak.
All this and more!
Your turn: What’s on your bucket list? I dare you!
According to Pooh
“It is more fun to talk with someone who doesn't use long, difficult words but rather short, easy words like "What about lunch?"-Winnie the Pooh.
OK, so we know what Pooh thinks about conversations; how does Pooh feel about the word count in picture books?
Yesterday, I received a note from my agent about the length of picture books. She wrote that they are getting shorter and shorter. And many comments she is receiving about rejected submissions say they are "too long" or "too many words."
While last year 1000 words was the absolute longest length for a picture book, now it's 600 words (according to her analysis of picture books she has sold in the past couple of years. ) Of those, 2 are mine, coming in at 151 words and 353 words.
Both books of mine are concept books not "story books." One, DAD and POP explores the "concept" of being a child with 2 fathers; the other, YOUR DADDY WAS JUST LIKE YOU, is a grandmother sharing how her grandson and his father were so alike as children. I wonder, how many of the other books on my agent's "sold" list are also concept books, or poetry? (Poems, rhymed and free verse, are usually shorter than prose.) Story books are often longer because there is more work to be done in telling a traditional story. The author must:
1. establish a problem;
2.show the main character trying to deal with the problem (often by choosing wrong solutions)and the problem becoming worse and worse:
3. realize the error of his or her ways and best, fall so far it feels as though all is lost;
4. choose a best solution, try it and succeed; or
5. realize his or her goals was way off base and he or she was better off before.
All in 600 words or less? Before any illustrations have been drawn to accompany the text? You try it...*
I get that picture books are getting shorter. They are more about illustration today than they have been in the past. And increasingly more picture books published are created by author-illustrators. Pictures are worth a 1000 words. And they can tell a story. The problem is, I'm not an illustrator. I'm a storyteller. I use words not images, to tell stories. Where does that leave me?
While once picture books were for children between 4 and 8, I'd say realistically, they are now for children 0-6. Those children older than 6 are reading on their own, and reading chapter books. (Not to say that older peeps don't like being read to, nor that picture books don't have value as literature for older students. Admit it...who doesn't enjoy a picture book?)
I'm no sprinter. I wasn't when I was a kid running track and I'm not now. It takes me a while to say what I need to say. One review of my 2005 award-winning, 2008 award-nominated picture book NOT NORMAN, A GOLDFISH STORY, referred to my text as being "bald" which we took to mean "tight". (The word count for NOT NORMAN is about 730 words.) I took that as a compliment. I had done what I set out to do: Pare my story down to the absolute shortest word length possible and leave as much room as possible for the illustrator's interpretation. Currently: today-yesterday-tomorrow, I am revising what I hope will be a future picture book. Presently, the text is 800 words and I'm trying to cut, shave, pare it down down down...but to what? What do we sacrifice in writing that tight?
Yes. Picture books are a marriage of text and illustration. And yes, children, especially preliterate children, "read" the illustrations and with them learn to interpret text. But... Much of storytelling, of hearing/reading/enjoying picture books comes from the text, the language, the character's voice and, dare I say it?...the author's voice. What will disappear if I cut 200 words from my story? What will that reviewer write about the books I'm revising now---which are supposed to be 130 words shorter? What's more spare than bald?
Me. That's what will be lost. My personality. My voice. I am long winded. As anyone who has ever read my blog postings knows, it takes me a while to tell a story. I am not "flash fiction." Just as it took me a few hundred yards to reach my stride on the track field, it takes me a few hundred words more to tell a good story.
So, what do I do? Do I cut cut cut and try to sell Kelly fiction-lite? or do I just keep writing stories I enjoy telling knowing they may end up in a drawer.
Or, do I quit trying to write picture books and wait/hope/pray for a reversal in word count?
P.S. Yes, yes yes: In keeping with the current trend, I should cut this posting by half. That having been said, ask yourself: what do you wish you hadn't read?
*This is just one example of a story model--there are others (is the word count less?)
It’s Procrastination, I know…
Writers are often asked, “Do you write everyday?” My answer: “No. But I think about writing everyday. And some days, I do everything I can not to write"…
Today. I awoke with only one obligation: a 6:30 am call with my editor. After that my day, all day, was clear for writing. I woke at 6, took a shower, make a cup of coffee and:
6:30 Made the call
7:30 still talking (second cup of coffee)
8:00 almost off
8:37 hung up the phone
That done, I sat at my desk and pulled forward the revision folder I wanted…needed to work on. The computer was on, but e-mail, internet, everything was minimized. My finger hovers over the Outlook icon. “Later,” I promise. “You checked it last night before you went to bed. Nothing important has happened since then…”
9:18 after receiving and sending 11 important e-mails, I take matters in hand and carry the folder over to my work chair—a round ottoman perfect for spreading out on and spreading out files.
9:22 should have gone potty before...
More coffee and vitamins and water….3 glasses. I haven’t been drinking enough water…
Forgot to feed fish…better feed fish
Bing…incoming mail
Respond.
I push send...Bing Bing 2 more come in. I didn’t open them, but I couldn’t help glancing at the top few lines which automatically pop up on my split screen layout. One is a note saying I’d sent my writer’s group check in note to the wrong “Jen.” Stupid, stupid, stupid me. I have to send an apology. Now, or I won’t stop thinking about it.
My stomach clenches…the vitamins. I took them on an empty stomach. If I don’t eat something, they’ll make me sick…
May as well send my editor that note we discussed while I eat, no sense in waiting…
Bing
Bing Bing
Quick answers to those. Post that birthday before I forget. Finish the last bite of cereal. Carry my dish to the kitchen.
10: 08 It’s smells stuffy. I hate it when the house smell stuffy, stale. I light the candle in the entry….while I’m at it. Carry the candle to the bedrooms, hall, baths to light others.
Bing
It’s not that I don’t know what I’m doing. I know. I can define procrastinate. According to the Free Dictionary.com: “To put off doing something, especially out of habitual carelessness or laziness.” ...so close to procreate [from Latin prōcreāre, from PRO-1 + creāre to create]. They share the same prefix “pro” from Latin, meaning “in favor of." So, it's like being in favor of "crastination" whatever that might be...I better look it up...
Google procrastinate. Land at Podictionary, “A Podcast for Word Lovers” hosted by Charles Hodgson. “There three parts to the word and two of them together are almost redundant. The prefix pro- has a sense of forward about it so in the context of procrastination, one is pushing that chore, maybe cleaning out the garage, pushing it forward until some future time. The second syllable, cras, means “tomorrow” in Latin and the “tinate” part means belonging. So it means push it off because this is a task that belongs to tomorrow. “
So "cras" means tomorrow... Tomorrow? What am I supposed to do tomorrow? I know there's something...did I write it on my calendar?
“Stop it, buckle down!”
It’s the danged computer, my blessing and curse. I carry my folder to the other room.
I've just settled down when Aan, our driver, comes in with the orchid’s I’d sent him to buy. Cymbidium orchids, angrek bulan, moon orchids, full, white, gorgeous. But their leaves are all dusty and spotty. Why doesn’t anyone every take the time to wipe off their leaves?
Maybe I should get in the mood first, by reading a little first. Reading inspires me… Spread out the pages, so many revision comments…more than I thought. This should be good. Plenty to work on…
It’s so quiet. It will just take a minute to turn on some music…nothing new. Set the folder aside. Push play, adjust the volume.
On the walk back to the table, I happen to glance into my office at the monitor on my desk. A new e-mail? It’s Sarah’s blog entry. I love her blog. I just peek at the intro. So cute and sweet and sad. I need to tell her, right now. It will just take a sec. If I don’t I’ll forget later…
One of the orchids falls over. A stem breaks. Dang. There goes a whole stem of flowers.
Don’t want it to wilt.
Better put it in water.
It would look lovely in the tall clear vase...
With some rocks...
In the bathroom…
Say, these old flowers don’t look so bad….all they need is fresh water…and their stems cut…they might look good mixed with the white orchid. They do! That’s lovely…lovely. Straighten the towels. There.
The dining room table has insurance papers laid out along one end. I’d left them there to remind myself to work on them. I could sit at the other end…. Or, I do hate filling out the forms, and my handwriting get sloppy when my hand gets tired. The best thing to do would be to fill out a few forms at a time. 2 now, 2 later, 2 later…. Okay 4 now.
12:32 I am crazy. If anyone knew, really knew what I do all day…
I should write this. This would be a really funny blog entry… It’s procrastination, I know....what are the rest of the words? It was fascination I know, dah dad a dad ah dah, dad ah…maybe I could write a parody about procrastination…I’ll bet I have that song on CD…
With photos! Where’s my camera?
Oh, but first, a little soap and water on those dusty orchid leaves…
‘Tis the Season!
We are mid-way through Ramadan, the Islamic month of fasting. Everyone is looking a little worn from keeping irregular hours and not eating and drinking during the day, feasting most nights. You’d think after several weeks, the city would be at a stand still. That might well be the case if it weren’t for Idul Fitri. Idul Fitri marks the end of the fast. “Idul” from Eid, an Arabic word meaning "festivity", while “Fitri”, Fiṭr means "to purify". The holiday symbolizes the purification after completing the fasting month.
Officially Idul Fitri is a two-day holiday, but schools and most people take a week or more off. It’s much like the Christian Christmas Season, Hindu Diwali, and Jewish Holidays (whether these groups like being linked together or not). People spend time with their families and gather with friends. Everyone exchanges gifts, imbibes in rich foods they don’t splurge on the rest of the year, and return home broke and exhausted.
And holiday traffic is horrid. It’s taken me a while, but I have finally, with the help of our driver, Aan, figured out the traffic pattern. Because every Muslim gets up before dawn to eat and pray, the travel times aren’t staggered like they are the rest of the year. In mass, the whole city finished their morning ablutions and rushes to work. This makes the commute take twice as long because the streets are crammed with 2 or 3 times as many vehicles as usual. And then, beginning at 3:30, everyone floods the streets again, in a mad rush to get home or to parties for bukah puasa, “breaking fast.” Traffic vanishes when the call to prayers begin at dusk. And from then until dawn the streets are blissfully empty.
In response to Ramadan traffic patterns, Curtis has adjusted his routine. He waits until after dark to leave work (not that that’s unusual; it now premeditated.) And I’ve adjusted mine (the big shift.) I’m a morning person. I prefer to work in the morning and run errands and exercise in the afternoon, when my creative energy ebbs. But this month, I’ve reversed my schedule.
And it’s working out pretty well, better than I ever imagined. I’m finding that I enjoy the long afternoons to sit at the computer, not having to rush home so Aan can get to the office in time to wait for Curtis. And I’m getting lots accomplished without as many interruptions. (I’m also using Ramadan as an excuse to send Rusnati and Rohemon home early, which may account for the lack of interruptions.) Isn’t that often the way? Enforced change bringing welcome results.
Idul Fitri brings on the same stress as these other holidays. Everyone scrambling to buy gifts, organize travel, and pay for it all. It’s worse for Muslim’s in Jakarta as they are considered the “rich” relatives because they live in the “big city” and are paid “big city” wages. What the folks back home don’t realize—never do—is that city life is way more expensive than village life. As a result, the cost of everything—everything—rises during Ramadan.
Which, looking at the signs, doesn't seem the case. Just as “back home” there are Christmas Sales, Ramadan Sale signs are everywhere. However one must look closely as prices have been doubled and more for these special “sales.” And, whereas, normally, everyone bargains (it is usual to pay ½ to 1/3 the asking price) during Ramadan bargaining goes by the wayside. Vendors, like everyone else, are so desperate for money, they won’t bargain. They’d rather gamble that whoever is buying needs the item badly enough to pay more. It does cost them sales, especially from bule, “westerners” like us, who don’t need anything. But just wait. When the holiday’s end, the real sales begin. Everyone will be broke then and honestly scrambling for cash as they have squeezed every cent dry.
It would be nice to say that witnessing all of this has wizened us up. That this holiday season we won’t be buying and paying and doing ourselves into debt. I'd be lying.
Besides, which "season" is that exactly?
As cultures intermingle, holidays merge. We traditionally participate in the Christmas and Hannukah celebrations, and since moving here we've joined the Idul Fitri basket/gift giving frenzy. (I've already purchased all the goodies.) After all, ‘tis the season...
Voyeaur is Putting it Nicely
I’m a little ashamed of myself this afternoon, and the more I think about it, the more ashamed I am…or should be. After a tearful afternoon spent with Rusnati and Sani, over at Mrs. Teri’s house, I came home and took on a totally new-for-me persona, something I never in a zillion years would have thought myself capable of. I became a Facebook Peeping Patty. We’d been were over at Mrs. Teri’s to collect all of Suharti’s belongings, and her due pay, and discuss the hospital bill. Suharti died a week ago today.
The hospital bill, for 3 nights in ICU where they “couldn’t do anything until she was stabilized” came to Rp 18,690,000. About $1850.00, including 2 million rupiah, about $200, for the ambulance to drive Suharti home to Cirebon for her funeral, a drive of about 5 hours. (That was probably the best value of all.)
To put it in perspective, Suharti’s monthly salary was Rp 1.5 per month, about $150. Her due wages including one month back pay and one month Ramadan pay was RP 3 million. So the bill upon her death was almost a year’s wages—which her family had to pay before the hospital would release her body. Mrs. Teri paid Rp 10,000,000 of that as a deposit when Suharti was checked into the hospital. Without it they wouldn’t have done a thing. Not. One. Thing.
While all the expenses are itemized and the charges noted, by all accounts that cost seems exorbitant. I’ve discussed this with several people, Indonesians and Expat employers who have paid their staff’s medical bills. The cost of a hernia repair and 4 days in the hospital was half that amount; Sani’s mom spent more than 2 months in the hospital and the bill was Rp 50 million, with an operation, medicine and post-op care included. Suharti’s doctors treatment was to “wait and see.” For that the hospital charged more than 18 million…six times Suharti’s due wages. How long is it going to take for her family to make up that cost?
Rusnati, Sani and I went over to Mrs. Teri’s with bags of large bags, expecting to pack everything up ourselves. The other ladies on Mrs. Teri’s staff, the one’s Suharti had worked with, had already packed her things into boxes. I don’t know if Sani and Rusnati were disappointed or relived not to do the packing. They both sobbed when they looked in her room. On the dresser was a tiny, lid-less bottle of cologne. The ladies passed it around and sniffed. “Suharti,” they said, nodding at the familiar smell. Mrs. Teri sniffed it and smiled, too. Then one of the ladies took the bottle away to bag it up. Bottling Suharti’s scent for later.
We returned home with Suharti’s possessions--4 boxes and bags in the back of the car…about the amount of luggage I pack for a vacation. I told Rusnati to go home, then. That Aan, our driver, would take her and Suharti’s belongings home. But Rusnati didn’t want to go. She had work to do. She wanted to make Curtis’s lunch.
So, she went into the kitchen and I came in my office and sat at my desk. I didn’t want to do any real work, but I didn’t want to seem as though I wasn’t doing anything, so I “pretended” to work by clicking on Facebook.
I didn’t set out to look up old classmates, I clicked on “search for friends” so I could look at Max and Lexi’s photos, and grand-niece Adelaide, fresh and new, at something happy. Then I read the notice saying search for classmates from Huntington Beach High School class of ’76, and some lurker demon took over my body. I poured through all 14 pages of people who said they’d graduated from the same school, in the same year I had. But how could that be? They all looked so old, even older than our parents used to look when we were in high school, and they looked really old. (I don’t look that old, do I?) I recognized some of the names but few of the faces. Only 2 or 3 stood out as familiar. One Japanese woman looked exactly the same—figures (next life I want Asian skin).
I found myself getting miffed at people who “hide” their personal stuff. Dang, I wanted to know if they were married, had kids, where they lived. One couple surprised me by stirring up dirt and my thirst for more… .As it happened, I had gone through middle-grade and part of grammar school with the man nee’ boy. He’d played sports with my brother, too. And once, in 5th grade, we’d had some sort of special event where we made box lunches to exchange with another classmate. The then boy and I were supposed to exchange, but he had turned his nose up at the tuna salad sandwich I’d lovelingly prepared for him and refused to swap, so I ate it (or not, as I recall feeling so embarrassed by his cracks about my soggy, warmish, tuna salad I could barely swallow.) As it turns out, these two had gotten married before his graduation …she was a grade older…hmmmm. Why? I wondered looking at his photo, squinting to find traces of that lanky boy within the manly facade. What’s the rest of the story?
Others from my class were single with children, married with grandchildren, some were still surfing after all these years and rock climbing in knee braces, others still favored “Alice Cooper” and “Led Zeplin” music or lived in Livermore. So many stories. The sad part was that I didn’t know any of them anymore, and after all the hours and years we’d spent tangled in each others lives, didn’t want to know them. Many of them know each other though. They’re “Facebook friends.” They probably even have reunions…probably go to them, too…or at least get invited…
I tried to shake of a wave of Christmas green and red, jealousy mixed with embarrassment--after all these years a part of me still longs to be “popular.” Do any of them ever ask: what ever happened to good old what’s-her-name?
Then, in the same way movie cameras pull back sucking viewers out of a close-up so we can see the wide-screen, Rusnati calls from the doorway to say she’s finished and pulls me back, back to reality. And I’m ashamed of me, of my petty feelings, of my voyeurism. Am I really so shallow? So easily sidetracked? This is supposed to be about Suharti. What would she say if she knew I was stalking old classmates while her sister cried in the kitchen?
Maaf, Suharti
Yesterday, August 17th, was Indonesian Independence Day. It’s celebrated much the same way as 4th of July is celebrated in the USA, with picnics, games and fireworks. The streets are festooned with red and white flags and buntings. The stage was set for a rousing good time—then it rained. I’m glad it rained.
Suharti, my maid Rusnati’s youngest sister, about 35, a single mother of 2 children, a girl about 7, and boy about 4, died yesterday morning, August 17th at 2:30 am. She died of either a heart attack or stroke, we will never know which. Suharti was a runner, a strong, smart woman, with a shy demeanor, determination, and quick wit.
We first met Suharti 4 years ago, when our friends: Joy, Michael and their son, Alexander, relocated to Jakarta. As we do for some new families, we helped them find household staff. When Rusnati learned that I was looking for a maid, she mentioned her sister, Suharti. At that time, Suharti was living in the village with their parents and her 2 young children. A shy, skittish, cowed woman, Suharti would barely look you in the eye.
She’d started with a bright future. Educated in Catholic school, like her siblings, Suharti was working, doing well when she met and married a “bad” man. From what I have been able to piece together, “bad” means her husband was a womanizer, drinker, maybe gambler—or any combination of bad. At some point in their marriage, either before their 2nd child, Kiki, was born or after, he took her to live with his family in Sumatra and dumped her there.
The part of Sumatra where Suharti’s husband is from is matriarchal, meaning the woman own everything, and is advised by her oldest brother. The men must leave the area, make their fortune elsewhere and return with enough to pay the bride price if they want to marry well. Returning home with a strange wife (and daughter) would not sit well with mama, to begin with. However be dumped there when you husband leaves is really bad. A woman without a husband is nothing in this society. A woman left by her husband is even lower. A woman who can't keep her husband is trash. So, Suharti, who had by all accounts been abused by her husband, after he left was then abused by his family—physically and mentally.
Rusnati wasn’t sure what all went on at this time. After Suharti married and her husband took her away, they had very little contact with her. Then, one day, shortly after the birth of Suharti’s son, the family got word—either Suharti called, or a friend called…somehow, someone got word to the family that Suharti’s situation was bad. Rusnati, oldest child and bossy-boss took the ferry to Sumatra, made her way to the mother-in-law’s home, bundled up Suharti and the children and took them home to the family village near Cirebon. (The boy baby was either too tiny for the mother-in-law to care about, yet, or else Rusnati snuck them out without her knowing, because in Muslim families a boy child never would have been allowed to leave.)
Although Suharti was safe there, life was still not good. She had failed—miserably. It didn’t matter what her family thought, and how happy they were to have her and her babies, to everyone in the village, she was a disgrace. Not enough woman to hold her man, she was shunned, gossiped about, laughed at…Suharti couldn’t wait to get away.
When she first arrived in Jakarta, Suharti rarely spoke, often didn’t seem to respond to what was said. She cowered when a man, any man, walked in the room. And she was terrified of Joy and Michael’s dog, Callie, a Dalmatian who growled and snarled at everyone—us included. (He scared me, too.) Many Muslim’s are scared of dogs. Many won’t touch them and won’t work in a home with a dog, because dog’s are unclean animals. Devout Muslims who touch or are touched by a dog must go through a complicated cleansing ritual to be purified.
Suharti was definitely not a quitter. She stuck with it, stuck with the job, stuck with the family. She watched and listened and learned—and even learned to manage Callie. She could have lived-in as Joy and Michael had servant’s quarters. But she chose not to. She craved independence. At first she stayed with Rusnati’s family. Then she got her own tiny space—a room with a shared bath. She started running, made some friends, cut her hair in a swishy shoulder-length bob. Began dressing well, wearing lipstick, and smiling. She blossomed. We watched the flower unfold, marveled at the changes, rejoiced in Suharti's rebirth.
Joy encouraged Suharti to be more, to take English classes and cooking classes—American, Thai, Indian. She and Xan (who is an inspired, creative chef) taught Suharti to cook Mexican food, BBQ and other family favorites. “Why are you so nice to me?” Suharti would ask. When we had parties, Suharti and Rusnati worked them together, earning some extra money, enjoying the excitement, the preparations, the festive foods.
Joy suggested Suharti take computer lessons so she could get a better job, but Suharti didn’t want to. She could make more money as a maid, she told us, “besides, I am too old.” (Indonesians have mandatory retirement at 50, so it’s difficult to get a good job, or start up the ladder at the ripe old age of 35 or so.) Suharti religiously sent money back to the village to pay for her children’s school, clothing, etc. and returned to Cirebon to see her kids occasionally, but it was clear that she didn’t enjoy being there. When their father became ill, she joined the family in chipping in to pay for the cost of his medicine, too.
Their father, Bapak, a retired wood-carver, is the primary caretaker for Suharti’s children. (Men here commonly tend the children while the women work. It’s usual to see a group of men gathered on a bench, chattering and smoking while holding babies and tending toddlers.) Rusnati loved to tell me how Bapak would take them with him to the garden and they’d follow behind like ducks in a line.
After Joy, Michael and Xan left Jakarta, Suharti went to work for Mrs. Terri as a cook, upon their recommendation. Being a “cook” is the highest job in the household help chain. It is testament to Suharti’s commitment to learning that she made the huge leap from maid to cook, got the job and kept it. When I saw Mrs. Teri at the hospital on Monday, as she was leaning over Suharti’s bedside, all Teri could talk about was how much they loved Suharti’s mashed potatoes and chicken enchiladas, how much the boys were missing her being there, making all their favorites. How anxious they were to have her back… Although Suharti was on a respirator, with unfocused eyes and an erratic heartbeat, she responded to Teri’s words, even smiled a little from one the unencumbered side of her mouth. She deserved to smile.
Suharti took excellent care of herself, was thin and strong, exercised, ate well (shunning traditional mostly fried Indonesian food, she preferred steamed fish and vegetables). How had this happened? On Friday, Suharti wasn’t feeling well. At the end of her work day, she retired to the servant’s quarters and was taking a shower when she collapsed. She called for help, and one of the maids helped her up and to bed. (Suharti decided to live in at Terri’s house as they have lots of staff and Suharti enjoyed the company.) Saturday was Suharti’s regular day off, so Terri didn’t expect to see her and so had no idea Suharti wasn’t well. However, at around 10:00 am, Teri noticed a strange woman going into the servant’s quarters. She asked the houseboy who it was. He told her they had called a traditional healer to massage Suharti because she was ill. Terri went back to see what was happening. Suharti was in bed, speaking gibberish, clearly out of it. Terri ordered her driver to take Suharti to the hospital. She then called Suharti’s mother in Cirebon who called Rusnati. Rusnati and Rohemon rushed to the hospital.
Hospitals in Jakarta do not treat charity cases. When the driver brought Suharti in, they would not do anything without money. The driver returned to Teri’s house, got a few million Rupiah (a couple of hundred dollars), and headed back to the hospital. Whether before or after he returned, Suharti’s heart stopped, she was resuscitated and a nurse was keeping her breathing by pumping a hand-held respirator. Suharti lapsed into a coma. Her eyes were open but, as Aan, our driver, and Sani, our helper and Suharti’s friend, told me: “there was no person inside.”
The hospital took x-rays, did blood work and determined that nothing body-wise was wrong. The problem was either her heart or her head. They wouldn’t know until they scanned her head and that small, ill-equipped hospital didn’t have the scanning machine. Besides, the heart doctor doesn’t work on Saturdays.
Slow, long, agonizing, worrisome wait to early Monday morning. Suharti regains consciousness. She responds correctly to questions asked her by the nurses and by Rusnati. She knows she has 2 children, she knows she works for Mrs. Terri. She knows her sister. But no one knows what will happen next. And no one knows when the doctor is going to come or when the scan will be done.
There is a distinct class system in Jakarta (maybe all over Indonesian, but I can only speak for here.) Unless you are a rich Indonesian, or an Ex-patriot you are nobody. The rich Indonesians make sure everyone knows they are somebody by speaking out—loudly—to be sure they are heard and they get what they want. They also push and shove their way to the front of lines and into elevators, toilets, etc. usually leading with their giant purses. Expats command attention by similarly being loud, but it’s not necessary as our very “caucasian-ness” commands attention. Indonesians, Javenese, however, soft-spoken, round-eyed, unassuming Indonesians, taught to stoop with one hand beside their backs when passing superiors, taught not to draw attention, not to make a fuss, are invisible.
When I arrived at the hospital Monday morning, Rusnati, her sister Ruskeni, and cousin, Yani, were there. So was Mrs. Terri, who had arrived shortly before me. Having never seen Ruskeni or Yani before, I had no idea who they were and they sat quietly, hands folded, waiting… Rusnati hadn’t left the hospital. She alternated between checking on Suharti in ICU, going to the mosque to pray, and sitting, waiting. Still no doctor had spoken with them, any o fthem. They didn't even know which of the busy looking people was a doctor. And they had no idea what was going on. It wasn’t that they hadn’t asked. Rusnati is a lion, never shy about speaking up, ferocious in defense of her family. But the nurse couldn’t or wouldn’t tell them anything except that the doctor was coming later…maybe at 3?...maybe this evening?
Finally, bossy me, muscled my way in. I asked the nurse questions, everyone Aan, Rusnati, Ruskeni, translated my pigeon Indonesian and together we learned that the heart doctor would be in until he was finished with everything else, after 8:00 pm. Suharti was supposed to be taken to Pondok Indah hospital (the larger hospital) for the scan, but when??? In the end, I got the doctor’s phone number from the nurse, gave it to Terri, who sent an SMS to her doctor, an ex-pat doctor who is Indonesian, Dr. Isabel, and Dr. Isabel called the heart doctor who immediately returned her call. Suharti was too unstable to move. “Frankly, at this stage, it doesn’t matter which hospital she is in,” Dr. Isabel said. “Until they can wean her from the respirator, they can’t do the scan or move her to a better hospital.”
Suharti’s heart failed early Tuesday morning, August 17th at 2:30 am. It is Muslim tradition that a person be buried before sundown on the day they die. So, while no one at the hospital could rush to help her until the payment was secured, they sure could bundle her up and ship her out post haste. By 4:30 that morning, 2 short hours later, she was in the ambulance with her sisters on her way home, to the village near Cirebon. Two other cars full of Jakarta family drove with them. By 4:00 that afternoon Suharti had been buried.
Ramadan, the Muslim month of fasting started last week. During this month, it is Islamic tradition for believers to ask forgiveness of family and friends for any harm they have done in the past. “Mohon and maaf,” they say, “forgive me and I am sorry.” The practice of asking forgiveness is familiar. In Christian religions believers also ask for forgiveness. Rather than asking forgiveness from those they have wronged directly. Forgiveness is asked from higher powers. “Forgive us our sins,” goes the prayer. “Forgive for our trespasses and forgive those who have trespassed against us.”
After the funeral Rusnati called me. She told me about the funeral. I told her that I had called Joy, Michael and Xan to tell them about Suharti and other platitudes one says when one doesn't know what to say. In closing, Rusnati apologized to all of us. At first I thought she, Rusnati, was apologizing for any trouble she was causing for inconveniencing us. I shushed her. She repeated what she had said, naming each of us in turn. And then I realized, Rusnati wasn't apologizing for herself, she was apologizing on behalf of her sister. “Maaf Suharti,” she said. “Forgive Suharti.”
Forgive me, Suharti. Mahon and Maaf. I am sorry.